Read-aloud passages
Make a contrast clear
The first draft describes every feature of the project, but it never says what the team needs to decide.
PractiseRead the full passage
The first draft describes every feature of the project, but it never says what the team needs to decide. The next version will begin with that decision. We will explain the main reason, give one example and leave the supporting details in a separate note. This does not mean the details are unimportant. It means a listener needs a route through them. After reading the opening, someone should be able to tell us what choice is being proposed and why it matters.
Pause between the problem and the proposed change.